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*Please comment only on this and previous chapters to avoid spoiling.
Holy fecking gods. Yeah, so this is only “half” of the original chapter outline I wanted to write, but it still ended up longer than normal by around three pages. This means I split up the outline material and there will be at least 11 chapters now, which is a good thing since I think I need more room to develop some things properly. Heh. A lot more talky than I intended. Also, I never intended to put the garden flashback there, but it just happened. Oops. The intended flashback has to go into the next chapter or elsewhere. ^^;
Okay, back to how I went “disease shopping” at the beginning of the story:
Japanese encephalitis: (1) It had to be native to at least Japan and unknown in the Western hemisphere; (2) there had to be enough danger, but a majority survival rate; (3) the symptoms had to be fairly generic at the onset; (4) can’t be contagious since I didn’t want Natsuki getting sick; (5) symptoms should occur some reasonable period of time after the vector event to avoid too much suspicion; (6) there had to be enough variety in symptom manifestation that I could fudge stuff. (Of course, all of this is to reach a certain scene… um.)
I didn’t find any solid information on whether or not there are required immunizations for it in Japan. Here’s a cookie to people who remembered the very first sentence about the mosquito bite. That is indeed the vector. :P I assumed most readers would just chalk that up to a narration detail.
There was, however, a huge timing problem after I shifted the entire timeline from summer break back to the Japanese spring break. See, the disease peaks during the summer months in Japan, and even in the southern islands (Okinawa is subtropical), the earliest spring window is supposed to be in April, not March–the time I had them go off on their “trip.” Oh, well.
Randoms: Many (Western) hospitals ban cell phones, but I did find one amateur reference that mentioned cell phones are widely used in Japanese hospitals. I wasn’t sure how to structure the hospital bathroom setup (which will be a reused setting later, I think), but I decided that since it was a more “expensive” private room, it could have a more traditional ofuro+shower/toilet/sink setup. Shared rooms in Japanese hospitals are, of course, cheapest, and they use a communal bathroom/ofuro.
More important stuff: Mai makes another appearance. I figured that a good friend of Natsuki’s is going to eventually get to know Shizuru, if everyone is on the level with each other, so to speak. Hm. But I decided not to let Mai in on their secrets just yet; that would seem a bit too nosy especially when those two haven’t even fully dealt with it (well, in my world, that is).
(…Wow, that was a lot of useless crep. Assuming I lost most of the readers by the first paragraph. :P Am I using too much detail and slowing the pace in places? Or maybe it’s going faster now because there’s less narration. Hmm, can’t tell. Looking back to 1.1, I see that I had far more narration than I do now. Did I mention that I dislike building dialogue? I don’t know… I kind of want to go back to the narration style I had earlier, but dialogue has been a lot more necessary lately… which takes me a lot longer to write.)
Looking forward to: More interactions with Reito, Yukino, Haruka, Nao.