*Please comment only on this and previous chapters to avoid spoiling.
*Comments may contain spoilery-ish stuff.
This is my very first attempt at any fiction prose and thus my first attempt at combining dialogue and narration. I don’t even read much fiction (these days) if I can help it. Literature majors and lit pros should be able to see problems in narrator voice, omniscience, perspective, and the like, though I’m fairly certain I can be consistent with tense–if I try.
Consider 1.1 to be stylistically a preface. There’s a lot of material there that has been done already in many forms in other fics… I assume. I mean, how many times can we reiterate that Natsuki likes mayonnaise? In any case, I actually have three two main arcs (“parts”) planned for Syncope. Each arc will consist of an indeterminate number of chapters, and each chapter will be of widely varying length.
In Part 1, I am primarily concerned with presenting realistic characters and character growth. I find that stories with strong characters but weak plot are still more enjoyable than stories with a strong story premise but an unempathetic cast. Therefore–apologies–but plot in this first arc is going to be fairly incidental. I need to learn dialogue and stuff like that.
I will try to be as accurate as possible with factual content, if I have the time to research it and assuming my sources are largely correct. Natsuki is 17 because she clearly says “jyuu-nana” in the anime, which means 17. She’s a year behind where she should be and a year younger than Shizuru (3rd year–graduated), which means Shizuru is 18 and Mai is 16. I’m going by the anime, though I no longer have access to most episodes and am waiting for DVDs, so I may ask some questions and hope people can answer. Um, I hope I can get the characters in-character from HiME. Please discuss if you think an interpretation utterly infeasible; I might have had a good reason to present something one way but failed in execution.
I will try very hard not to end any part in a cliffhanger. That’s just cruel. I mean, what if I get writer’s block? Yech. I’ve decided to prevent comments for the actual content posts and allow comments on the author notes posts, which will be separate–therefore every part of Syncope that is posted will have two posts! To make it a little easier to navigate, I will use the same icon for the double post, alternating with a different one. General posts (like questions) will have a different icon. That makes three different icons.
Finally, I will pretty much allow all comments that follow netiquette. Just be civil and avoid using distracting things like ALL CAPS, “1337” (“leet-speak”), exclamation points ending every single sentence, and stuff like that. :)